I want to live in a small town!
November 24, 2007 
Living in a small town and living in a big city both have merits for inhabitants. Living in a small town has three merits. First of all, you can feel seasonality change. This must be an original lifestyle of human beings! Second, you can get much free time. Therefore what you do depends on you! Third, the prices of rent and land are low. You can purchase your own house!
On the other hand, living in a big city also has three merits. First of all, you can earn much money in a big city than in a small town. Second, it is convenient for you to live in a big city in many ways. For example, there are enough hospitals, stores and communications. Third, you can get much information around you.
Although both stands have merits and demerits, I like living in a small town of countryside. The reason is that there are many relationships between people in a small town!
> Living in a small town and living in a big city both have merits for inhabitants.
OK
> Living in a small town has three merits.
OK
> First of all, you can feel seasonality change.
seasonal
> This must be an original lifestyle of human beings!
what do you mean by ‘original’?
before civilization started?
たとえば？
In early history, we had no heating or air conditioners ….
> Second, you can get much free time.
論理的に弱いのでは？都会でも暇な人は暇です。
Claify what you want to mean by ‘free’ time.
> Therefore what you do depends on you!
Why exclamation marks here and there?
> Third, the prices of rent and land are low.
lower than xxx
use ‘comparison’
> You can purchase your own house!
purchase v.s. build
Why exclamation marks here and there?
> On the other hand, living in a big city also has three merits.
OK
> First of all, you can earn much money in a big city than in a small town.
OK
my typo ; Clarify, instead of claify — sorry
> You can purchase your own house!
purchase v.s. build
Why exclamation marks here and there?
> On the other hand, living in a big city also has three merits.
OK
> First of all, you can earn much money in a big city than in a small town.
OK
much mony –> use comparison, like ‘more money easily’
山林や農業でも大金は稼げますが。。。
> Second, it is convenient for you to live in a big city in many ways.
OK
> For example, there are enough hospitals, stores and communications.
enough?
many?
more than xxxx –> use comparative
> Third, you can get much information around you.
論理的に弱いのでは？田舎でも可能では？
more (quantity) — or quicker (speed)?
Both country side living can access as much information as large city living, with Internet and TV and the like.
> Although both stands have merits and demerits, I like living in a small town of countryside.
stands –> both is plural
stand –> meaning?? have
like –> prefer
> The reason is that there are many relationships between people in a small town!
there are?
we can easily form community relationship in a small town
論理的に弱いのでは？都会でも可能では？
論理的というのは、反論や突っ込まれるのを想定されてtightにすべきの意味です。
比較をしているのですから、上手に「比較級」を駆使したほうが良いでしょう。メインの教科書の比較表現を参考に。